Peer Review-20417

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?


-5. It is technically perfect, follows the classical argument, displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic. It is also clearly the product of thorough drafting and research

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

-It was difficult to see her essay. It would be better to arrange the essay's paragraphs.
Thesis
What is the thesis?

-Cyber diplomacy of  the North Korea

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

-Yes. Freedom of internet has been good resolution of debate for long times.
If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

-What policy Korean government should have over internet diplomacy?

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

-Yes. I can easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument.
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 

-Her introduction caught my attention, leading to the thesis comfortably.
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

-Yes. The narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic.
Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

-Yes. The confirmation adequately support the thesis.
Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

-Yes. The refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner.
Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

-Yes. The conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis.
What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

-I don't think it has lacking parts.
Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 

-I agreed with the thesis.
When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

-I agreed with the thesis.

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 

-Yes. She was using research effectively in her essay.

Is the research from appropriate sources?

-Yes. She wrote the sources with researches.
Are the sources obvious?

-Yes.
Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

-Yes. They were all appropriate and relevant to the thesis or essay.